When a new shop opens in Clover Falls, Jessica Reader is excited to purchase a nineteenth century family portrait. The more she learns about the painting and its subjects, the Palmers, the more her life spins out of control. Her eighteen-year-old son, Noah, tries to understand and halt his mother’s fall from grace. Will the painting also pull him into the spreading web of corruption?
There were way too many male main characters. I didn’t know who I was supposed to root for with them all stepping over into each others territory constantly. I wanted a lot of the guys to end up successful by the end but by being at odds I was left unsatisfied by many of the storylines resolutions. The different storylines were also hard to follow because there were so many at the same time. Overall it was a muddled story with too much going on and too many characters that ended in an unsatisfying manner.
Good story that is hampered by bad pacing and sloppy writing
Alright so I’m probably that last person you want to see here but I have to put my two cents on here. I don’t think this story is bad at all there is a lot of good but oh boy is this a mess. But Positives. How you write your characters is great better then ever. There fun they actually feel real at times the dialogue is great like someone said they don’t feel like 2d characters. There is actual depth to them and they often times talk there age. That to me is the highlights. The sex as always is great hot as hell. (When there is sex) When it’s chapter 20 I feel the story picks up from there. Honestly wow the characters are the best written here on this site. For me personally. That being said. The pacing to this story is awful. In the beginning it wasn’t to bad but chapters 10 thru 20 are painful. There is hardly any build up to the main mom and son having sex. No seduction or barely any. To much time with a meandering plot. Not only that once the story get’s going Rawls will introduce characters and they forget about them half way. Like the aunt character. Gone. The two futas in the beginning that took half of the first act. Gone. Mary eh whatever. Also the constant cutting back and forth with the narrative was exhausting. You will have the main plot with Eloise and the family then once that gains momentum BAM…Different characters. Like wtf. Unnecessary action scenes at times. That whole thing with Sam was pointless and felt just added for another sex scene. Another thing she has sex with someone else that also felt pointless. This also needs to be said. Despite me like the growth the character go through but can we for fucking once again just have a jerk character. You had a nice guy character last time can we change it up again. All in all I feel the story is a mess. Not structured and I recommend you go back to doing an outline for this type of story. The painintngs and the eloise story should’ve been seprate stories. Plus the cliffhanger. Oh why Rawls wtf. Worst ending now I want to see this with Mary but i know your not gonna follow up with it so why didn’t you just finish that story arch with Mary. I’m so glad this story is done. I was getting so sick and tired of seeing this on this site. Way too long could’ve ending months ago if you cut out a lot of things. Just I don’t like this story anymore and I hate to say it I think this is one of the worst ones on here. Perhaps that will change but I didn’t like this. I like something in the water more and that is saying something. At least that one felt like it had structure and wasn’t just a bunch stuff thrown together You guys can’t hate me all you want. I don’t care I’m just speaking my thoughts and if I can say something perhaps you guys could actually benefit with actually taking another look at the story and being more critical just givging things praise doesn’t help anyone. If you did actually legit like it. More power to you. Anyways that’s it. I’m honestly hestiant on the next story. All i got to say if it’s like this one I’m officially done with this site. Anyways see ya Rawls and sorry for being so negative but it’s how I feels