The Palmer Legacy Ch. 1 to 40

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When a new shop opens in Clover Falls, Jessica Reader is excited to purchase a nineteenth century family portrait. The more she learns about the painting and its subjects, the Palmers, the more her life spins out of control. Her eighteen-year-old son, Noah, tries to understand and halt his mother’s fall from grace. Will the painting also pull him into the spreading web of corruption?

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  1. Ilovestory

    You are a good story teller. You have get me to like and hate this story at the same time. You give the chance to see something that if i was in same place of them, i will may be doing the same thing when i was at this age. I learn on me.

  2. Jacobsladder

    This story was an over bloated convoluted mess with far too many thinly developed characters I couldn’t keep them straight nor care about them. Who is doing what to whom I couldn’t tell anymore.

  3. AfkasH

    Damn now I kinda want a spin off of them going on that road trip and have fun.

  4. srv313526

    I was wondering which story comes first chronolgically. Palmer legacy or haunting of Palmer mansion?

  5. srv313526

    You are welcome. I hope I get to enjoy her more in future adventures. Such a sexy funny ghost.

  6. srv313526

    I really love Eloise character. I think she is one of your most colorful and interesting characters. She never ceases to amuse me. Great job with her Rawly.

    1. Rawls

      Thanks for the feedback! I love her too! 🙂

      1. srv313526

        You are welcome. I hope I get to enjoy her more in future adventures. Such a sexy funny ghost.

  7. srv313526

    Hi Rawly. This is an excellent story as usual. I was wondering if there are any plans to illustrate this story at some point. I would to see it. Thanks for another great story.

    1. Rawls

      Thank you for the feedback! Yes, I do have plans to illustrate it. I’ll probably make an announcement about that in the next couple months.

  8. aeropyre84

    Really enjoyed this story, I think waiting until it was finished and being able to read straight through helped keep the multiple storylines fresh and not forget what was going on.

    I think there is a bit of a plot hole towards the end. Why would the Erasers/Iconoclasts not utilize the secret stairwell windows to the other paintings as a backdoor ambush? Being able to pop out and attack your target with no warning no matter where they are would be a pretty powerful ability.

    1. Rawls

      Thanks for the feedback! I’m glad it worked well in a straight readthrough. That’s a good question about the secret stairwell … I don’t remember if I had a reason for not using it, or if I just didn’t think of it 🙂 Fair point, though!

  9. katialeti

    The latter chapters have some of the funniest scenes I have ever read in erotica lmao. The exaggeration and/or contract in some scenes is just top level!

  10. youngstudent7

    The slow build kinda mad me drop off reading this one I don’t know if it becomes better after I dropped off. Not a comment on the quality of the prose but felt like too loose of a narrative pace for a very broad and nice idea. Might jump in again or listen to the audio version if that comes up to see if it pays off and some of the hints towards kinks or narrative lines aren’t my preferred for stories.

  11. Holyx

    Hey Rawly what the plan for the next major story? Are you going to have another poll to let the readers vote on or are do you have a story premise in mind already?

    1. Rawls

      Hello Holyx, I already have a story idea ready to go. The title is Le Belle Ile en Mere. It will lean heavily toward the horror/sci-fi genre. The first chapter should release on Friday.

      1. Lobria

        Can you say what the pacing is gonna be like and how the main son is gonna be. That to me will help my expectations of the next story. I hope it’s not convulated like this one is.

        1. Rawls

          The new story will be very different from Palmer Legacy in tone, theme, and scope. That’s all I’ll commit to right now 🙂

          1. Lobria

            I get ya. I’ll give it a try at least.

          2. youngstudent7

            So far in pacing the Le Belle Ile is kinda like a cross between Palmer Mansion and Palmer Legacy. Potential to out strip Mansion for my enjoyment.

  12. Thomas_windsor

    Helluva good story. Really loved this one. I hope that is Noah’s baby in Ella’s tummy.

    1. Rawls

      Thank you for the feedback! Based on the timing, it certainly seems like Noah’s.

  13. John_Sn0w

    First the NTR with Enchanted Specter. Now with this main story with Noah mother NTR .
    Is rawlyrawls going the route of Korean NTR novels?
    Please put a break to NTR.

  14. Majorchill666

    Just wanted to say I’ve been really liking the story as of late. While at first I was frustrated by the slow development, I now appreciate it more because it helped develop a really good story later on. Another great one, imo, Rawls!

    1. Rawls

      Thank you! I really appreciate the feedback. This story has attracted lots of complaints, but I went ahead with my plans for it anyway. I hope people will find it a satisfying read when it’s complete and they don’t have to wait a week between chapters. Almost to the finish line …

  15. Osiris908

    Ugh when is this story gonna end? I love your work and always anticipate Friday to read the current story but I just haven’t been into this story once Noah got with Jessica. I don’t want to come off as rude – again, I’m a huge fan and supporter of Rawls work. This is the first story I can’t get into. There’s WAY too many characters and it’s just one huge free-for-all and I really don’t like all the meta Rawls story references. Perhaps it’s just me. Every story can’t be for everyone. For the past two months I’ve been hoping it would end but no such luck yet, at least I don’t think bc I stopped reading. Sorry to be a bummer

    1. Rawls

      To answer your question. It’s going to end pretty darn soon, 🙂

  16. adscrypt

    Think the latest stuff with Sam pretty much put the final nail in the coffin on this for me.

    I can’t help but think that eventually she and Noah are going to reconnect, and it’s just going to feel like he got massively cucked if he takes her back after he womb has been “swimming” in some other dude’s jizz, “painting” or not. It’s like there was hardly even a passing thought of Noah before she not only gets overpowered by the stench but actively initiates further contact.

    Again thank you for all the content, and usually I do love your stories, but this is going down as one that just wasn’t for me. I did try to see it through but it just feels too . . . distracted. Like no one really has any agency or decision-making power, and things just happen and no one has any real reaction to them. The story just moves along and people get swept along like powerless, empty bodies or something.

    1. Magnus58

      Funnily enough the fact that everyone is just being swept along is one of the parts that I like most about this story since it makes the chaos the paintings are creating feel really unnerving. Even the people trying to figure out the mystery really have no idea what’s going on and are themselves being pulled in different directions by the paintings.

  17. Kynlur3077

    Don’t get me wrong as I have enjoyed the vast majority of your stories but this one I have found a bit difficult to get into..
    If I had to guess (and I am) I think that it might be because it felt like the story was jumping backwards and forth from one set of characters to another a bit to fast.
    Anyway I do want to thank you for all hard work you put into your writing.

  18. handcraftedd

    First, you’re my favorite erotica author, so all criticism should come with that grain of salt. Also this is my opinion and I don’t create anything so I can hardly judge someone else about art. I think the thing that bothers me with this story compared to your others is the lack of a connection that these characters feel like they have to each other. While the prose components (description, emotion) are getting better with each story imo, the stories that feel the most complete to me are the ones where you had the characters develop connections to each other (Enki or Wicked Tower, etc). With this, I feel individual chapters create bonds between characters and then you have them run off the next chapter and I go “oh, is that a thing still a thing?” The stuff with Noah and Katie, Sam & Patrick etc. feels gratifying but working against what came before. Also when it comes to the multiple conflicting parties in the story, I guess it adds an element of surprise or danger in the narrative, but the looming threat of pseudo-rape is a bit of a mood killer imo. Alternate pairings are great but when one has expressed strong sentiment for someone else or strong aversion to their partner it’s jarring to where my head has them and a big turn off. May just need to come back in a bit and read as a whole.

    1. Rawls

      I appreciate the feedback! There are a lot of moving parts in this one. It’ll probably be finished in a month or so, maybe reading it then would be best.

  19. burning8

    Speaking as a fat guy, it would be nice to get a story where the fat guy isn’t a piece of shit.

    1. Rawls

      This is a fair criticism and I thought about it when starting this story. Roy was one of the truly bad, bad guys in my stories. And Palmer Legacy characters are mostly doppelgangers. So, two chubby dudes as central villains … But I decided that it’s where the story wanted to go. Don’t worry, this won’t be a theme that continues on.

  20. Acclord

    Rawls,

    While reading the 27th chapter I could not stop imagining the events happening and the Music playing “Its beginning to look alot like christmas… ”

    Wonderful chapter… I am really curious to find out what is going to happen.

    I would love to see Noah fucking the whole city while saving them from the other paintings.

    Thank you!

  21. alldragon

    Dude. The truth is that the text and development has been great. But if you’re going to make Sam go down with Eddie you’d be shitting everything and it would just be shit, you can’t afford that. Sam is just Noah’s, period, Eddie can’t put her hands on her, he can’t, I hope you don’t fuck her up like that.

    1. Rawls

      I already have the plan for Samantha laid out. Stay tuned 🙂

    2. pghcrew

      Eddie conquering Sam isn’t necessarily a bad thing, in fact it would be almost objectively be good. Villains don’t always lose, heroes don’t always win. I’d be more disappointed if there weren’t any consequences for Sam’s actions than if there were. Plot armor is the worst thing that can be injected into a story.

      1. pghcrew

        Oh, and heroes don’t always stay the heroes.

  22. Old-school Perv

    Last chapter was great. I was hoping that Noah and Kathy were going to fuck, and it looks like the groundwork for that is being laid down. Really hoping for dp with one of the characters, maybe Sam or one of the mothers getting slammed out by Jimmy and Noah. The depravity just keeps getting better.

  23. haim_none

    Just a small mistake in chapter 25…
    ‘“Thanks, Dad.” Nick led his mother upstairs ‘
    should be
    ‘“Thanks, Dad.” Noah sled his mother upstairs’

    1. Rawls

      Thanks, I had Enki on the brain. It’s fixed. The corrected version will release with the update on Friday.

  24. John P

    Combining Lord Enki’s twisted imagination with long-legged, large-breasted MILFs who crave anal … it doesn’t get any better than that …!

  25. Bmallory1539

    honestly IMO, keep doing what you’re doing. You are my main source of erotica, and i could only dream of writing stuff like this. every one of your stories has something unique and amazing to it.

  26. greatwhiteape

    It took a while to get here but wow, so worth it. I honestly can’t stop re reading this chapter. It’s gold. She tried so hard not too lose herself and still be his mother. I hope you can find an illustrator soon, this story has some amazing scenes that would make for some mind-blowing images. Nice touch with the bed, I was not expecting that! 😀

    1. Rawls

      Thanks! It’s not easy to illustrate the long novels, but it is on my radar.

  27. Lobria

    Hey Rawls me again. So I came back to check on it cause I figured that some progression was being made and it was. It took way to long in my opinion. but still nice. Now once again some negatives. I will get this out of the way first. To me and for some i bet. This doesn’t feel earned narrative and audience wise. You barely did any teasing leading up to this. You spent a lot of time setting things up and story which is good but I want and need teasing in order for the pay off to feel great. Enkie you did a great job at doing that. Here not so much. The side stuff should feel like extra along with the teasing and it wasn’t. I don’t think the pacing for Noah and Jessica getting them to having sex for all these chapters was the best. I honestly feel that like something in the water you wasted to much time on them. For another story like this there needs to be a better balance between the side stories and main one. I’m not here for the side stuff I”m here for the two main characters.

    I would also like to say that for the next story I really hope it’s faster pace cause I dont’ think I can take another slow burn story. i need something faster just for a change of pace and I feel some other’s feel the same way and I would also like a asshole son again. Another mothership wilderness would be nice. I don’t know just something quicker. Cause not gonna lie I think if you do another slow pace story I’m completely out. Especially if it’s done like this.

    Now positives. Everything else. The characters are written so well. The dialogue it’s such a mass improvement over your other stories. Better then Enkie and it was great in that as well. Your characters have life to them and that’s a plus. The main story is great it’s interesting and you do a good job of keeping it interesting while not front loading us with it. You bring it up occasionally. Very well done. Also the side stuff is very well done and I love that you gave Jessica and Noah there own chapter that’s great.

    So yeah that was another review on what i think so far. Some of you are probably tired of me but hey I like commenting on here. Cause it feels a lot safer then other sites. I still have really big problems on the pacing of the story and I do think it will be a good ending. But I still think you need some work on how to balance the main mom and son stuff with the side stuff. More teasing please. It would’ve made them having sex satisfying instead of me going. “Fucking finally” Anyways, that’s all have to say. Sorry for coming off like a jerk. I just like commenting and want to see you improve and actually want to enjoy your work more. See Ya Rawls.

    1. Magnus58

      Personally I see Palmer Legacy as the Avengers Endgame of the dark stone universe in a way. All the stories are coming together and there are multiple characters to follow. In Endgame, Tony or Steve were probably the main characters but they were not the only focus of the story. That’s probably why the lack of Jessica and Noah up until chapter 22 doesn’t really bother me, because we have been following other characters and the Readers aren’t the sole focus of Palmer Legacy. Noah also kind of cheated in speeding up his relationship with Jessica because Jimmy is giving him help since he’s lived through multiple versions of each day and knows what is best for Noah. I like when the stories interact like that. Based on some of the comments this story isn’t working for everyone but I think that changing the genre, pacing and overall layout between each story makes each one more unique and therefore a more interesting read.

      1. Lobria

        The difference with Endgame is that all the characters all had enough time to do cool shit and had the same amount of action scenes. There is no character that doesn’t get a time to shine. Well except Hulk. So perhaps it is the same. But with Avengers you want all the heros to have the same amount of screen time or at least have enough time to do the cool action stuff. For Noah and Jessica there isn’t that much time and there isn’t good enough build up once we get it. I do think that sex scene is hot as fuck and Rawls keeps adding new ways to make sex scenes super hot and fresh. But it still doesn’t feel at least to me completely earned.

  28. Magnus58

    Chapter 21 was great. Noah and Jessica are close to going all the way, and the scene with Eddie and Mara was awesome. I wonder if Mara will bring more women to her painting to become bitches for Eddie.

  29. Schunn99

    Hmm, thinking Mr. El is (Jehovah?) El is Hebrew translation of Yahweh / Jehovah. Much I don’t like Eddie, I am waiting for elaa and Mara’s pregnancies. Noah will learn to enjoy the new increased size of his mighty rod. Now he needs to knock up his mom and Samantha.

  30. lucky_jinx

    My first fever feedback of sorts.
    So im gonna first start this by saying, i like many forms of mom/son erotica, whether comics, manga or western games, so i love all your stuff, not just because you mainly put out momcest but because your overall theme of incest is what always draws me in, the way you combine burning lust and yearning love mixed with motherly/familial instinct is great combined with your erotic writing style. I loved The Wicked Tower, with Naevia, Cassia and Dellia being competent and lovingly fierce characters, even following Vell in to battle as armored maidens, and Palmer mansion with Julie and Penelope getting corrupted for Danny but still cares for him a great deal, Enkis puzzle has Kate as an amazing sister while the mom mostly remained as the grand price the main character works for till the finish line. So i quite love the caring women you write where they are consumed by lust and corruption but still has that nurturing and loving personality. This also means im quite indifferent to characters opposite of that, most of the mothers from Theres Something in the Water, where they pretty much become drugged out breathing cum dumps with not much purpose etc etc. So i may have skipped half the sex scenes in that novel, and only followed the main characters erotic moments.
    Now for the Palmer Legacy novel
    This one goes on quite a bit setting up different characters, so the starting parts isnt focused much on the main character pair (Jessica,Noah), that is quite fine in my view, since its quite simillar with Theres Somehing in the Water in pacing, multiple characters with their own families falling to corruption, only that the families here on Palmer Legacy has different paintings as sources of corruption instead of an alien ball, so you already gave an interesting setup that is possible without explaining why (this) painting has (that) effect, granted the reader finished reading you past novels/stories, which is the weakness of this kind of referencial setup. A weakness i also dont mind since most of us are already here for your novels. Maybe add a preface at the start pertaining the referenced novels? So unfamiliar readers can know or read that youv’e already done the stories depicted in the paintings?
    Anyway we are on chapter 20 now and the paintings are showing their true colors, the plot is picking up and motives are shown and conflict is inevitable.
    I mostly skipped Eddie’s and Paul’s scenes because they are quite antagonistic in this setting, and like i said before they also lack the fierce love and longing for their mother and vice versa, so im quite indifferent to them.
    I like the story overall.
    With Jessica, Noah and Samantha you have already shown their feelings for each other, how caring and protective Jessica is to her son, so i can only hope that sex and passion will ramp up in future chapters, hurdling the other paintings obstacles with the help of Eloise, Enkis puzzle has the most wholesome mom/son pair since it echoes the novel the painting is based on, they are also the most vulnerable one since they dont have much protection and lastly with Kathy, she’s a wild card i would think, she seeks to be the alpha bitch, so i can only imagine how you will play that out.
    The antonistic paintings can only lose at the end, but the question is always at what cost. So i look forward to how you write all of that.
    With that i can only say, most of your readers are a silent majority, i was one before this feedback, so whether or not the majority of feedback is a bit on negative side, a lot of us still loves your work, and mostly gives our opinion on the polls, well i can only speak for myself but considering you have thousands of patrons and mostly 100s of feedback under this one, the polls are an easier one to gauge and give opinions on. Thats it.
    I love you work.
    Take care Rawls

    1. Rawls

      I really appreciate the detailed feedback. It’s hard for me to objectively judge a story when I mostly get negative criticism (which is okay, as long as it’s constructive I welcome all feedback). I’m enjoying writing this story, and that’s the most important part to me. I think that usually translates to enjoyable stories. I mostly agree with your analysis. There are few twists and turns coming up. Thanks for reading and sharing your thoughts 🙂

    2. Italian10inch

      The hottest scene ever was Noah growing inside Samantha.

  31. cykbigboicyk

    I skimmed through the comments on this thread and thought it would be a good place to put some feedback, given the sheer volume of it that’s already here.

    Personally I think Rawls’ best work is with The Wicked Tower, Enki’s Puzzle, and Something in the water (in no particular order). Something that all of those stories had was (1) clear main characters, (2) a clear forward thrust of the plot and story, and (3) offered new ideas compared to Rawls’ other works. (42XXL also is an underrated highlight for me, but it’s more a continuation of the ideas of the dark stone, and doesn’t necessarily meet the aforementioned criteria).

    Here, this story feels like it lacks clear central main characters or plot thrust. Perhaps, worst of all, it doesn’t really feel like it brings something new outside of the aforementioned lack of central focus. There are lots of self-referential ideas and images throughout this story, to the extent that it’s necessary to have read all of Rawls’ main works in order to really follow what is happening. That’s not to say that being self-referential is bad in-and-of-itself. But just like with star wars references, I’m of the opinion that references to other works the artist has made should be subtle easter-eggs for longtime fans, rather than the center of stories.

    I had a thought while reading this story – could there be a story surrounding the dark stones themselves? They have been present throughout Rawls’ works from the beginning. I understand that providing a story may shed light on something that’s meant to be a magical plot device, and that an explanation of sorts may ruin the mystique. But this idea, to me, feels like it could be a much more interesting and new way to connect these stories together in a cohesive way.

    Anyways, those are some of my rambling thoughts. Overall I think that Rawls is a fantastic writer (evidenced by my willingness to pay for this content) and I hope my criticism is received constructively as it is intended.

  32. Craig23

    I was one of the original people to be critical of this story, but I feel like I need to comment again here. Yes, all opinions are valid, but at some point I worry that we might be spoiled to the quality of Rawls’ work. Even her “lesser” works are better than most people’s best, and she works hard to bring originality and variation to her stories. Thanks for your work, Rawls.

  33. Simon S.

    So You seem to have two male templates for main characters. A. Stupid. Evil. Proactive. Has their own wants and desires. B. Kind. Courteous. Spineless. Directed by a strong willed woman. Only the commissioned stories seem to be the exception and one other that would be a spoiler to mention because its the twist at the end. I find it odd that your earlier work didn’t really have this. Will this trend continue/increase?

    1. Rawls

      Wow, okay. Gonna have to disagree strongly with just about every part of this. I’m not sure what you mean by commissioned work, I worked on three commissioned short stories years ago. I don’t do commissions now. I don’t think Noah fits into your Manichean analysis of my work. But for argument sake, let’s say he does. You just have to look at my previous main novel to find a protagonist who was an asshole and also a good guy. ¯\_(ツ)_/¯

  34. Lobria

    I hate to say this but I’m done with series for awhile. I’ll be back in a few weeks or when I hear that the main mom and son are actually having sex. I understand building things up but there has been no teasing or barely any from the mother and her son and it’s taking way to long. Just like something in the water I just am kinda here like come on get to it. All this other stuff is nice but feels like filler and a crutch and you are relying to heavily on them. I’m sorry Rawls this is the first time i’m doing this with your stories but I”m checking out. I’ll be back in a few weeks or when I hear something is actually happing between them. I really hope if you do another story like this you get to the mom and son stuff quicker and I mean sex. Have fewer sub plots or having get to the main point already. I know you have things set up already but for god sake this is too long without anything between the two of them. Just a hand job really. No blowjob or anything else. I thought this was gonna be a reversal and the mom was gonna do more teasing but that’s not the case. I feel I like some of the other stories you have in here and want to see more of that then the main one or your short stories that you have recently realized and looking forward to that more. I’m sorry for this I don’t like coming off negative but I have to say something. This is something I was loving before but I feel like you have completely dropped the ball on this. I just don’t want to get to the very end and have them have sex and it’s only for two chapters. That would lame and i feel that’s what you are gonna do and that will suck. And now the futa stuff is gone. You probably bring that back but for how long? I’m sorry I’m done I can’t read this anymore weekly. I’ll check it out in a few weeks or when this is done. Later Rawls. I”m sorry again. Fro what’s it worth I do think your writing has improved greatly and it’s really good hear but this is a erotica and I want to see more stuff with the mom and son. Alright I’m done now. Sorry again.

    1. CeeBee42

      I don’t see what the real problem is here, while I do agree that the main mom, Jessica, should begin having full sex with Noah long before the end, its not like we’re being deprived of mother-son incest in this story. We have Eddie and his mom, Paul and his mom now, too. And it seems like we will also have Ronnie and his mom. This are more mothers and sons having sex than in any of Rawls’ previous stories and each of them have their own corruption. The main thrust of this story is about these worlds colliding and they are now doing that, and still including mother-son incest. It seems like your particular taste is about wanting to see ONLY ONE couple of a mother and son and just have the story stay solely focused on this. I’m glad that there are multiple angles here. I like more married women and girls. There are still plenty of short tales to pull from where there is only one couple and its a mother and son. Enki’s Puzzle had a very small cast, this has a very large cast. And I’m sure that Rawls will write another story that does focus mostly on the mother and son and they have sex earlier, just as sure that Noah and Jessica will be bumping uglies in the near future. We just have to be patient but I think there’s plenty to whet our appetite till then in this story.

      1. Lobria

        I agree we are getting more but for me personally and maybe just me I’m here for the main characters as well and when I see just build after build up after build with no pay off it irks me. I love everything else. The story, characters the little quirks they have the detail to them all the sex is great but that only go so far with me when the main two aren’t doing anything with each other. Also those either side plots are way to short or sometimes for me at least too long. Now at the end my mind could be made up if everything works out but for now I’m tuned out. Also I know there gonna have sex but when. Is it gonna be close to the end and we only get two or three chapters like at the end of ennkie. The only difference is that nikkin and Kate were have but loads of sex and there was teasing in the beginning. We get none of those things here. I’m sorry, I’m glad you like but this is probably just a me thing but the main mom and son should be the focal point and we should get to it quicker. Your right the next one will probably give me what I want but I would like for all the stories to do that instead of some. Take care.

        1. Rawls

          Again, I appreciate the feedback. When this story is finished, I will do a poll with a few questions about it to gauge how it worked for readers. I tried some different things here, and if they didn’t hit the way I wanted them too, I’m happy to adjust.

          1. Jymis

            Just wanted to say I like how you managed your story to stay as true to vision., And start working on some aspects that supporters vocalize. Nice work.

      2. Magnus58

        While maybe not every aspect works as well as it should, I agree that although we haven’t got much of the main mom/son we have seen lots of other moms/sons to fill that void. Some of the scenes have been a bit too short, but that is bound to happen when juggling so many intersecting plots.

    2. DarkArthas

      Better get used to it. Rawly has stated on her discord that the slow pace will be the norm now on her long novels going forward. I’m like you. I hate the slow pace and the lack of focus on the main characters. The side plots are okay, but I am not really interested in them. They feel like filler. I hope Rawly changes her mind about the pacing for future novels.

      1. Lobria

        I don’t mind slow at all as long as there is teasing or build up in the sex with the two main characters. But I do agree with you on everything else. Though I do think a lot of stuff is written really well and the main story is interesting but man the main mom and son need to get with it. It’s annoying. I know it will but it’s taking to long.

    3. Jymis

      I think its worse then you describe. The plot line talks about Noah protecting stopping fall. That didnt happen Noah watched did nothing, he knows she is defiled there is nothing save Thomas and her complete each other Eloise agreed. So fuck mom its to late we didnt even attempt to save. Noah is the shittiest protag son not once or even attempt to protect .mom.. cant now she belongs. To Thomas. Mo. Is disgusting whore and no son gonna fuck with her.

  35. Jtzabor5

    Not to complain but I’m gonna complain. Every one of the good scenes I come here for seem overly short and lacking….. Completion? Just this story.

    1. Lobria

      i agree. There too short and take away for me the main story of what I acutally want to see. At first I was for it cause I thought there was gonna be a balance but now I see there isn’t and now it’s just more and more build up.

  36. DreadWolf

    While I understand others’ misgivings about the pacing, I feel like I don’t have as much of a problem with it since I only started following the story relatively recently and was able to binge most of the buildup rather than having to wait for the weekly update from the beginning. Now things seem to really be ramping up so I have a feeling most readers’ issues with that will be addressed pretty soon.

    As for Noah, I personally disagree that he seems overly weak or whiny. I think part of it is the switch up of the mother being corrupted first over the son, so naturally he’ll be the one to be hesitant/suspicious of everything going on. I actually like that this attitude (in conjunction with the wider situation) let him and Sam negotiate the terms of the deal a little. Also I believe his most egregious examples of meekness have been when he came under the influence of the other paintings, which made him more docile. So now that he has the Palmers’ protection we shouldn’t have to worry about that anymore. Also if you recall he was pretty assertive when they confronted Eddie after they made the deal and ushered them away (which, by the way, was supremely satisfying; I really don’t like Eddie, skim his sex scenes, and really reaaally hope the deal will be enough protection for Sam because I seriously don’t want to see that happen). So yeah, I look forward to seeing him become more confident and uh… embrace the deal more, as it were, but I don’t want to see him become a dick like Eddie, and in fact love it when the protag in these sorts of stories retain a certain level of decency/softness. I also really love Noah and Sam’s dynamic, and am sort of hoping for their relationship to evolve into more of an equal footing, partners-in-crime sort of deal like we got with Enki’s Puzzle (which is my fav story of Rawls so far, btw).

    Anyways, I know that was a little long but I just wanted to offer a different perspective. Keep it up Rawls, loving your work so far. I’m sure it can be a lot to try balancing your own creative ideas with fan feedback, all on top of keeping up with multiple weekly updates, so I just want you to know I appreciate your hard work 🙂

    1. DreadWolf

      Oh, I also forgot to add I really like the detail that Noah has panic attacks. I don’t think that makes him weak, nor do I think it comes off that way in the way it’s portrayed here; it just makes him more multifaceted, and also provides an opportunity for him to be cared for by other characters (mainly his mom) which I personally like.

      1. Rawls

        Thank you for the feedback! It’s good to hear how the story is working for people, too.

        I don’t shift my plans for a particular story based on reader feedback, I have the arcs mapped out already. But I may tweak future stories based on what is working or not working for people.