Almost a century ago, something moved into the apartment building at 3838 Walnut Street. Ever since then, there have been disappearances and strange events reported. Follow several tenants as they try to uncover what’s at the heart of this preternatural building and how to stop the corruption that inevitably spreads within those walls. Their stories span different times, but they all have the same place in common: the nefarious 3838 Walnut Street.
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4.4 out of 5 dark stones (based on 61 reviews)
This is my new favorite story. Anxiously waiting for updates and thrilled when they come out
Glad to hear it, I appreciate the feedback 🙂
Definitely a big fan of your work. Can’t wait for this one to be illustrated!
In chapter 15 at the bottom of page 158, Rosalin hears panting from the “perusing” wolf. This one is easy to figure out, but you obviously meant “pursuing.” And seeing perusing is really rather jarring.
Yes; I’m a part-time editor on the side… (Oh, and I like the story.)
Thanks for the sharp eyes! This will be fixed on future versions of the story.
Hey Rawls. I wanted to say that I’m loving this story. I am really, really loving this story .I feel this has amazing pacing. Everything feels good in this story. I don’t think there is a dull moment in this whatsoever. I feel when you jump back and forth between characters it doesn’t feel jarring. You have things moving quickly and the best I can describe this it feels like mothership and Palmer mansion. Like you mix those two up and you have the same pacing as those two. Nothing feels ridiculously slow, plodding or filler. This is going wonderfully. Also thank you for all the sons being assholes. I’ve been wanting for awhile again and I have to say thank you. This makes this story so much fun again. I also like the story as well. I like the horror elements of it. Also one thing that I feel works better here is that you don’t have the son being or acting like the detective in the story trying to figure things out at least not now perhaps you will but regardless you don’t have that. No good guys son just corrupted and aggressive. Very much appreciate that. Seeing that makes me even more curious were it’s gonna go plus it’s not something i’ve seen already. The sexual tension is there the seduction is there as well. So there isn’t a point of the story were I am bored or thinking when is this gonna happen. No you have the seduction and that makes it so much better. This feels like your old stories and being back in form. also this is an example of me not hating a big cast it was always the pacing. Tremendous job on this Rawls I look forward to this story.
Thanks for the feedback! I’m glad you’re enjoying this one. I don’t think Joe has been corrupted by the building the same way the others have. Which is to say, he’s not an asshole. We’ll see how it develops.
Interesting. Joe Maryland right? If that’s him then I’m very curious with that then from what you say..
Yes, that Joe is way more relaxed and confident than he used to be, but he’s still a gentleman. Other than making his mom by him condoms, of course 🙂
Well of course lol. OK so that’s what threw me off a bit. Reading the latest chapter you are correct. I guess I was looking at it from the mom’s perspective. But hopefully some of that jerkyness comes out like the condom part. Good stuff I like his story as well. I look forward to reading more of this. I also look forward to the illustrations I feel reading it again like that will help me even more to fully get it.
Chapter 10 has another typo on the last page, and I think it matters.. On the first line of page 111, Abshir muses about checking in with “her”. I think you mean “Her”, right?
Thank you! Yes, you’re right, he will be checking in with Her. I’ve fixed it and it will be correct in the version that releases next Friday.
As long as you’re fixing stuff: on page 107 about half way down, “She stood wearily, ready to catch him…” I figured it out, but you surely meant “warily”. The meaning is quite different; wearily makes no sense.
Thanks for correction! It was a typo and will be fixed in the next release of the story.
Nasty error on the last page of chapter 8? The date given for the last section is February 1954, but you specified December 1954 in a previous section with these characters. Did you mean 1955, or is time going backwards?
Thank you for catching this typo. Time is not running backwards 🙂 It should say 1955. It will be corrected in the version of the story published next week.
Wow. This one is really wild, you have outdone yourself. It gives me slight Donnie darko mixed with devil’s advocate vibes mixed with the usual rawly magic. The interconnected, possibly converging, timelines give the it a sense of mystery, a puzzle to be solved. You also have high stakes as a character dies, is killed by another character. People died in the space cruise ship adventure but as a result of radiation and a monster but this is the second time that one of your characters commits a murder.
Thanks so much for the feedback. Really leaning into the erotic horror with this one. Lots more darkness ahead 🙂
Usually the enhanced virility/fertility of the characters is to the character’s advantage and happiness but in this one, even if they ‘win’ they still could ‘lose’ as who knows what the successful ritual will entail? It’s already cost one character and to no apparent benefit. For me, at least, it does feel like almost anything could happen to any of the characters both good and bad and the danger or horror could come from almost anywhere or anyone.
I also like how you have given your characters a bit of depth and not gone for cliches. The young Muslim women is vivacious and naughty instead of shy and passive.
I have noticed a trend with your young vivacious women characters like Maggie chambers and Ava Roslin; their character arcs seem to petter out or are pawned off to lesser character. Maggie chambers storyline was dropped particularly unceremoniously. Now it was a gods wrath that did it and that the reader feels the loss of that character is good for the oft repeated stakes of the story. I just think that the willingness of a slightly outsiderish person to be part and party to some of the more wicked activities adds to the libertine and debauched elements/themes in the story. As a reader one wonders if these vivacious characters couldn’t be useful conduits for bringing other women into the male protagonists sway, particularly women the vivacious character has a close relationship with. Your writings have a particular focus and ultimately it’s your bbq and it taste good, I just wonder if this particular ingredient might be put to more effective use.
At any rate, I am enjoying the mystery and the darkness in this story. Ithink you have really hit on something here. Please continue the great work.
this story is tagged as complete. is it still the main story or did you change your mind? also, i was wondering if it would be possible to tag add more nuanced tags to your stories going forward?
Thanks for pointing that out. It was an error because I made the page by cloning the last main novel which was complete. This story is ongoing.
I haven’t made more nuanced tags, because the thought of organizing that way exhausts me. But you can let me know what you had in mind, and I’ll think it over.
NP (y)
So I wasn’t thinking anything too complicated, mainly what forces are at play and whether the darkstone is involved or not. for example: Faaris B/Noises/surviving were more about blackmail/coercion/moral degradation over time, mothership/entrabide/serum/SitWater/etc were more science fictiony, and Palmers/aztec/etc were paranormal driven. Since you have relatively few stories (compared to literotic, for ex) I don’t think extensive tagging is necessary but as you write more stories it would be nice to tag some more nuanced themes. perhaps cuckholdry labels and such for this story and surviving the after. I’m happy to help if you’re interested 🙂
Is this one in the queue to be illustrated?
Yes, SatanicFruitcake has decided to illustrate this after she’s done with Wicked Tower.
I’m really liking this story, when do the updates usually come out?
This is a main novel, so a new chapter comes out every Friday.
Thank you for the time-line chart. It really helped me.
I appreciate the feedback!
So far, the 1954 setting is my favorite. The 2015 segments are a close second with 1993 in third place.
FYI – I noticed a typo on page 19:
“Here me … Brian Kwon … I am Ogganse”
Should be “Hear me …”
Good catch, thank you! It will be changed for the next version of the story on Friday.
Ok reading this I’m worried. This feels like it’s gonna be a convulted mess again. No offense. But I will of course give it a chance it’s just that your not very good at multiple stories at the same time and having it all make sense. Also depending how you write them I hope it’s not another something in the water. I hope whatever son it is is more like David then Patrick. Also put the different names and dates in bold and with different colors it would be easier to identify each story. Rawlys your scaring me with this story right now and I didn’t like the last one and didn’t like the last story with a big cast. I’m crossing my fingers this works for me. Keep it simple and have good pacing. For the love of God please.
I feel like maybe my stories aren’t for you. You are entitled to like what you like, but so am I. And so are all the other 2600+ paying members on this site.
I do like the large casts and evolving story arcs myself, but its often a fine line between being a fun read and a convoluted mess. For your longer stories, I tend to wait for a few chapters to be available before reading.
i put my foot in my mouth again on both stories. I’ll stop commenting or comment less. I do have criticisms at times but I still like your work but I do get to passionate and my last comment on mother’s return especially the language was uncalled for. I’ll just wait and see and just use a few words. Your stories are still good especially your shorts. I just get carried away. I’ll stop now. Making you uncomfortable and frustrated with me wasn’t what I wanted. I need to learn how to do a better job of doing this.
Again, thank you for the apology. I appreciate it.
Loved the new storyline, I hope it is maneageable not to get confused on story timelines. My sugestion is to try to concentrate on one timeline and avoid jumping around to much.
Agreed
Hi! Im only curious. Why start another story when there are so many good ongoing stories that are coming out much slower than for example Mother Returned. That story is the perfect example of what i mean. One story comes out fast and leaves all the others on hold. Take the new Palmer story for example, here the illustrated version is out looong before the next chapter is out. My favorite The Pleistocene Ring last chapter came out in november 🙁 Surviving the after is another very good story that i would love to see come out more often. Just my thoughts.
I have one very long novel going at a time, it’s not written for illustrations. All the other stories are shorter and written for illustrations. I write the next chapter when the illustrator is ready for them.
Thanks for all the comments so far! I’m looking forward to delivering more chapters!
Love the occult mystery angle of this story. The cadence of the braided stories is great. Excited to read more!
I’m really enjoying this so farl. Nice to start out with the intense stuff in the 50’s, and then we have an idea of what the other time periods and perspectives are leading to, without giving away the ‘why’ of it all. I’ve no doubt this is going to be an exciting one to see unfold every week
more like 1.5 times a month…
The main story novel chapters come every week on Friday. I haven’t missed one yet since starting in 2021.
Great start. Already a fan of the atmosphere and setting. I’m imagining the building as a perverted version of The Arconia from Only Murders in the Building.
The format of the narrative with the perspective of multiple families across timelines makes for an intriguing mystery.
Didn’t anticipate the format for this story. Will definitely be following this one!
exciting new beginning to another main story!