La Belle Ile en Mere Ch. 1 to 30

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When a catastrophe strikes a remote, deep space hotel, the Zaal family survive with a handful of others. Some survivors harbor sinister secrets. Eighteen-year-old George Zaal, must find a way to keep his mother, father, and older sister safe. Malevolent forces roam the hotel’s empty corridors and abandoned rooms. One wrong move and doom awaits. George must be smart, brave, and resourceful to escape La Belle Ile en Mer.

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  1. comicrelief

    This is a far better story than I expected from reading the title. My failing!
    I hope the artwork continues. Like the “Palmer Legacy,” this one deserves to be illustrated.

    1. Rawls

      What about the title threw you off? Just curious, in case it’s something I can improve on.

      Thanks for the feedback. I’m glad you enjoyed it! The artwork for Chapter 2 continues.

      1. comicrelief

        I made the [assumption] of a shipwreck scenario in french mandate south Pacific Ocean.
        I have been reading your material to my wife for a while now.
        There are a couple of them she has asked me to reread.
        This one she asked me to reread back to back.

        1. Rawls

          Hmmmm … that makes sense about the shipwreck scenario. I suppose the novel was a little different from that. πŸ˜…

          Thank you for the kind words. Any author would love to hear about a back to back read!

  2. Lobria

    Alright so here is my review. This story was really good and close to great not perfect like five stars but this was a great story and I had a great time and you definitely made up for the last story. I like the characters in this one but the best part was the horror story and the mystery elements to this. I was honestly on the edge of my seat in this story everytime that stuff came up I was like where is this going holy shit. My dude great stuff i was so into that. The world building in this so good and getting back to the mystery elements to this like when the hotel only spoke in french I was like oh what does that say must be nefarious. Lol it wasn’t but still it added to it. Also the journals you had excellent I love that it reminded me of old horror stories that had that. I wish you had for every chapter but if it would’v killed the pacing I get it. Speaking of which the PACING….OMG SO MUCH BETTER. YOU CUT THE FUCKING FAT!!!! Sorry but the pacing is what killed me in the last story. Here it’s so much better. Reason is that there is one main story going on and that’s it. There not multiple stories happening where you have to cut to this character and now this on and now this one. Just one, one were you take your time to explain and have us understand and simplify it and something different. Which leads into the character stuff the main mom and son stuff. Really good. Lots and lots of sexual tension and seduction which was sorely lacking in the last story. Mix with the story kept me engage and the way I saw this story was the apology story. Like the mom and son stuff which lasted a long time , lot’s of seduction like I said, less characters and a simplification of the story while making a few things different. That too me is what I liked about the story a lot. I love that. That character stuff I thought was really good, how they went through the story stuff like that. Also when you got to the sex stuff it was hot like usually and felt earned. When the mom and son had sex for the first time it felt satisfying and since you had all the sensual stuff between the two of them it felt earned. The faces you had them made was hot as fuck and want more and more of that love that.

    So that was positive lot’s of stuff the dialogue was also really good to. A few negatives but nothing too bad. I feel some of the characters like the main ones could’ve been a little more devolved like how you did the main son in legacy which was one of the few things I loved in that story. I wish perhaps he started off a little weak and scared and then grew much stronger and more capable which you kinda did but I wish you did more of that and some of the other characters like Anna I think the mom more development from her and the sister and Constance. Which I think you did less of that because of Legacy which I get but perhaps a little bit more here would’ve been nice. Also Nossy good character I love how you wrote her and she got the mot development but I kinda wish you mad her more of the one seducing everyone like making the son crave her mother more make her seduce the mother because she is shape shiftier so you could’ve used her to look like George and make her think it was him. But you did something different and not usual and it worked for the story but wouldn’t mind if you did that. Also I don’t feel you use her shapfiting that much to affect I guess you didn’t want her fucking more people because of the complaints from the last story but since you had all the sedction with the main mom and son I would’ve been find if you did for this. But I understand why. So I will say main problem is the ending to the horror stuff. I feel that could’ve used one more chapter or a few more pages took your time to end it because if felt to fast. Other then that that was my only issue with that. I do want more of Nossy and wish we did also I wish you would do more threesomes with son, mom and daughter seems you not into that or what but more of that would’ve been cool but in this story it made sense why but something to let you know. Also again I’ve said this already and you gave me a reason but still. ASSHOLE SON!!!! I’m getting tired of goody two shoes son I want the jerk son the one who fucks a lot and just dominates all the time. Hell more dominating would be great. You did the good son three times already I want that son back. I feel there is a way to do it but I don’t know I desperately want that for a main story. I also wish there was bit more milfs and he fucked more of them. Just more fucking of women. But once again the main mom and son stuff was the main point of this to make up for story that shall not be named.

    I feel that’s all I have for now. If I think of anything I’ll add another comment. But all in all I really like this story a lot. This felt nice and got me back into this site again because I wanted to give up during Legacy to be honest. Your short stories are great but there not as frequent as the main story and in my opinion that’s what I’m paying for mostly and if the pacing is not good then I don’t see why I want to be here more. So this story was really good and you won me back. Also don’t be afraid to add more characters into the story just focus on the story and let the characters dictate the story but if you do want to add stuff make sure it just makes sense. I’m still skeptical about the next story because why are you teaming up with someone are they just helping with the main story or is like a mother ship wilderness were it’s just non stop fucking lol. I’m down with that but if not then why. I’ll keep a open mind but will speak out how I feel like always. Anyways I talked enough. I do want to do more reviews for your stories because I think it’s fun and you also deleted my review for legacy because you got rid of the review stuff on it which makes sense because you have comments but still. Four out of five definitely want to read this again and will and you regain my trust again. Good stuff Rawls keep it up. Also I forgot to mention I perfer more supernatural or something affecting the mom and son to do these things have more of regualr romance is ok but I prefer the way you usually do it where the mom fallls and falls more into seduction. OK now it’s done.

    1. Rawls

      Thank you for the review. I’m glad you enjoyed it πŸ™‚

      1. Lobria

        Your welcome. I honestly didn’t think you were gonna read all that lol. But I’m glad you did.

  3. parsec

    The last chapter was really erotic. Great ending.

  4. Thomas_windsor

    What a great story. This one was really good

  5. Marty MG

    Oh no! Friday afternoon’s (UK) start to the weekend just won’t be the same without a new episode of La Belle! All good things come to an end so cheers Rawls for another belter! It’s on a par with Wicked Tower and my fave, Enki.!
    Looking forward to the new story of returning mom in this universe. So glad Enki brought me here!

    1. Rawls

      Thank you for the kind words! I’ve had a blast writing this one. Hopefully, the next one belts in the same way πŸ™‚

  6. chesswing

    Hmmmmm. So with the new lore stuff dropped in this chapter, is this starting to look towards creating a new universe for stories to be written or is this like a distant future or something for one of the pre-existing universes? My bet would be the former over the latter as there haven’t really been references to the stones that I can really tell

    1. Rawls

      This universe is actually pretty fleshed out behind the scenes. And we’ll get more of it. My next main novel will take place in the same universe. But it will not have the same characters or setting. It will also be more of a mystery, not horror like this one.

      1. Lobria

        Oh wow that’s interesting I’m curious about it. Is this the first time you have done this two main stories in the same universe? I’m curious about the characters especially son. Hopefully your make him a asshole. But regardless I’m excited.

        1. Rawls

          Well, Haunting of Palmer Mansion was set in the same universe as Dark Stone. So that is analogous. I see the jerky sons as more one dimensional, so they’ll probably mostly stay in the shorter stories going forward. Unless I can come up with a novel way to use that sort of character.

          1. Lobria

            Oh I guess I missed that about palmer mansion. Dang, I guess so. Well I hope you do because I really like that type of son and like to see it return its what got me into your stories. I like the sons you have now but man I’m getting a little tired of nice guys. Cross my fingers for asshole sons again for main stories.

      2. AuntLover

        Can’t wait to see what else this universe has in store for us!

  7. big

    This one gets better with every chapter. How many more chapters are planned?

    1. Rawls

      Thanks for the feedback😊 I have two more chapters planned. Then I’ll start a new main novel.

      1. Lobria

        Man I really liked this one but good things come to a end. Was hoping he have sex with his sister earlier and longer but oh well next time hopefully also I hope next story main son is a asshole or becomes one. Miss that would want to see it again. Will give full review once this is done. Take care.

  8. bigred411

    I decided to wait on this one until there were a large chunk of chapters. It was a fun read and I like the story. I appreciate the work put into it!

    1. Rawls

      Thank you! I do think these novels work best when read through without waiting each week.

  9. JTass

    Hey Rawly,
    I noticed a typo in Chapter 22:
    “He scrambled to the *disbursing* barricade. ”
    *should be dispersing

    1. Rawls

      Nice catch! I’ll fix it for next week’s edition of the novel. Many thanks!

  10. Numben

    Cant wait for the illustrated πŸ™‚

  11. AuntLover

    For me this is one of the best stories you’ve written so far. Up there with the likes of Enki’s Puzzle and Palmer Mansion.

    I can’t wait to see how all of this unfolds. Kapnos, the gloves, the Victorian age style culture, it’s all so immersive and has me wanting more. Keep up the great work!

    1. Rawls

      Thank you for the feedback! I’m having a blast writing this one, and it’s so good to hear that people are enjoying it. Lots more on the way!

    1. Rawls

      Hmmmm … lots of people have downloaded it. Try clearing your cache, reloading the page, and clicking again.

      1. Rubicon

        Chapter 17 is missing in the non texture version. It is present in the texture version. Also the texture version link has a typo. It is mentioning the palmer legacy texture as reference.

        1. Rawls

          I’m not sure what’s going on with it. Sorry about the typo, that was my mistake while I reloaded the chapter. Both links are working for me and most people, but I’ve had three reports of problems. I have reuploaded both links. Other than clearing your cache, I’m not sure what else to do. I think for now read the one that’s working for you, and hopefully the upload next week fixes this problem. Sorry for the issues. πŸ™

  12. Lobria

    Hey Rawls once again good stuff I only have a few things to say. Everything is still the same so I won’t repeat but I will say this. I like where George is going and how quickly you go to it. Or quickly enough. Plenty of seduction and still not fully in his mom yet. Love that this is excatly what I was missing from the last story. But..I do wish he was a asshole. Don’t get me wrong I do like your good characters and I like him but I still miss those asshole sons you had in your other stories or at least more forceful like in palmer masion. Granted it’s not over yet so there is probably a lot more to come. So I’ll wait and see. Also I don’t think anyone has mentioned it but I feel Kap is up to something or doing thing for her own gain. At least I think. She says in the last chapter planning her seduction I believe. Now that could mean something else but I feel I know what that means. But then she says she want’s to leave this place as well. As Alice says. “Curiouser and Curiouser.”

    Just some observations. Another thing, so is there no magic or thing causing him and Anne to act this way. I feel that’s a bit new for your stories if that is the case. Granted, it’s still not over so that could change but I just think that interesting. Not sure how i feel about that yet. But so far I’m liking this story a lot. Pacing good like I said and you cut the fat. THANK GOD!!! Sorry but I had to say that. You get to the point quicker and more efficiently. You don’t linger on side plots for too long. Just enough to keep us interested and to me that works so much better. Now I don’t want you to stop writing big stories like Mansion or mothership. But those stories need better pacing. Anyway’s I’ve gone on longer then I thought. Good stuff keep it up. See ya later Rawls.

    1. doorknob22

      I love the asshole sons and frankly; they are what I joined for.

      1. Lobria

        Oh I agree and I hope Rawls does that for the next story. That being said the way the so. is written here to me is very good. Much better then the last one and the story as well. We have still need to recognize the really good despite what we want and this is really good. But I 100 percent agree with you though but this is still top tier story and characters.

  13. QQSV

    Somehow, the title of this story has become polluted. If the intended name for the hotel is “The beautiful island in the sea”, as the character sheet states, the name should be “La belle isle en mer”. “Mere” means mother and thus completely changes the title significance. In fact, I have found some cases in the story where “mer” is used and others where it is “mere”. What’s going on?

    1. Rawls

      The title of novel is a play on words, since all my novels have to do with entering mothers. The Beautiful Island in the Mother πŸ™‚ It’s a joke. The name of the hotel is La Belle Île en Mer. I just did a quick check of the novel, and I could not find any reference to La Belle Île en MΓ¨re other than the title. If such a reference does exist, it is a typo and I’ll happily fix it if you point it out.

  14. bostant

    Great story , loved the plot but It is a bit too slow paced for me. Imho, sex is way under performed compared to where we are. George talking about love, happiness all nice and dandy but where is the lewdness and debauchery ala Mothership? This entire slow corruption concept is hurting the appeal.

  15. Lobria

    Hey Rawyls. Just gonna say that I still think your doing great with this. The pacing is great, I feel this is working much better then legacy so far and love the seduction of the mom great stuff glad to see it early hopefully you continue it. I also want to put a theory I have. The shadows I think are the dark stone or what’s inside of the stones. I putting that out there. Not sure if true but I thought that would be neat. Also side note it seems I keep getting logged out of here every day before it would stay logged in and the website is much faster especially on phone so that’s a major plus. But yes doing great so far the story is sucking me in right I’m honesty really hooked. Great job Rawlys keep up the good work.

    1. Rawls

      Thanks for the feedback. I’m happy to hear this one is working for you. I’m having lots of fun writing it. Interesting theory, but no. This story isn’t set in the DSU.

      As far as getting logged off, it’s probably that your browser is clearing your cookies. Otherwise, it is set to log out only after 14 days.

      1. Lobria

        Dang lol. Well was a interesting thought. Now I’m more curious about them. Also what do that look like? Are they just shadows or do that have a form?

        1. Rawls

          They are made of a black viscus liquid, with human body parts floating inside. One can only see the human parts when the parts float near the surface. There is a rainbow sheen on the surface of the creatures when they catch the light. They look very much like the thing that killed Ms. El Rashidi.

          1. Lobria

            Interesting. Definitely looking forward to seeing more of them. Very good idea for creatures or a threat. The story is just very intriguing to me. Thanks for explaining that to me Rawls. Keep up the good work.

  16. Kuanyang

    Finally had a chance to catch up and read all 12 chapters of this at one time.

    The setting in the future but socially back in the Victorian Era is quite intriguing and it would be interesting to see how it came to be. The relationship with Kapnos, the true form/nature of both Kapnos and the shadow creatures, and the ability of the AI to communicate with the shadow creatures are all mysteries I look forward to exploring in further chapters.

    There are quite a few other gaps I look forward to seeing filled, and not just in the female characters. ;P
    How could the escape shuttles have protected anyone?
    How did the Oceane not know that evacuation was going to lead to mass deaths?
    – OR was that part of the pact to feed the shadow creatures?
    How did Albert die – Kapnos, the Shadows, or something else?

    I really don’t foresee Ernest surviving much longer, but also don’t know how this will impact the dynamics.

    Waiting for more… πŸ™‚

    1. Rawls

      Glad you’re enjoying it!

      I’ll answer one of your questions, because I’m not sure that the text will address it directly. The skyrmion beam was tight, directed right at the hotel. Any shuttles or lifeboats that got more than a couple thousand meters away would have survived.

      There has already been an admission of guilt about Albert’s murder. It happened quickly, and there were other things going on. There will be a more direct admission in the coming chapter.

      Not sure we’ll go into the backstory of how society became so Victorian.

      The rest of your questions should be answered in the chapters ahead!

  17. Uberlad654

    It’s amazing to see you pump out another banger. The library here grows weekly, and I have to say that this is one of my new favorites here. I only ask to take your time with the slow corruption of the women around George, it would be a tragedy if it sped up too fast towards the end. Loving the Alien/Prey vibes from the setting too, really helps to keep the characters on edge and pushed to their limits.

    1. Rawls

      Thanks so much for the positive feedback. I’m having a lot of fun with this one. It’s shaping up just how I hoped.

      The characters will lead how fast things go between them. I won’t get in the way πŸ™‚

      1. Uberlad654

        Glad to hear! What inspired you to write this one?

        1. Rawls

          I love space horror stories, so I’d been playing around with this one for a while in my head. I really wanted to mash together several competing elements that could all be stories on their own and see what happened when they met.

  18. Divway

    Another spellbinding chapter. I love how you bring them alive. Each one has been slowly built. The characters true traits are begining to unfold as the stress levels increase…..so good Rawls. But….

    How did Mrs. Gwendoline Valentine i.e Kapnos’s get up higher then the Zaals (George and his mum Anna)?

    1. Rawls

      I’m glad you’re enjoying it! I’m having a blast with this story.

      Mrs. Valentine’s secrets will be revealed πŸ™‚

  19. Sluttybeignet

    Really liking this story(and really all your others ) its different. Love the hand thing. Keep up the good work! Cant wait for the next chapter! ❀

    1. Rawls

      I appreciate the positive feedback! πŸ™‚

  20. Lobria

    Hey Rawls. I have to say I’m really liking this one. It’s well paced right now. The way you write your characters is great. Each one has there own personality so it’s easier to envision who they are and what they look like . I also love the journals you have here. Gives a wonderful vibe and tone to the story. Something new and raises tension and wow you killed someone. I didn’t see that coming. Wonderful turn and twist and I appreciate the fact that George gets a blowjob early plus it seems that the seduction of his mom is coming soon I love that. Also seems that the alien can’t recall her name. Seems to be up to something. At least I hope so. I hope this goes down like your old stories where the son becomes corrupt like in palmer mansion. I”m crossing my fingers for that and I’m coming into this with caution. Palmer Legacy let me down so I’m hoping this one delivers for me at least.

    So far so good looking forward to reading this every week. Also I wan’t apologize for last or two month’s ago. When I left that comment on Discord I didn’t mean it to sound rude. I was just putting in my two cents. I’ll do a better job of that. I just got to passionate and upset about the story. My bad for that. Keep up the good work on here Rawls. Like the story so far.

  21. Jimmy

    A “safehand”? Has someone been reading Stormlight Archives?

    1. Rawls

      Yes! I mentioned this on the Discord server the other week. The gloves are an homage to the Stormlight Archives. I love the series, and I’ve been wondering how a forbidden hand would work in erotica.

  22. anteater1

    I hope you never illustrate this story. There are some stories that need to be illustrated in the mind. In my humble opinion, this is one of those stories.

    1. Rawls

      It’s difficult to illustrate the long novels, but I would like to illustrate all of them some day.

  23. anteater1

    I like the slow build. You are becoming an excellent writer, with or without sex scenes. Like Ahabscribe your ability to paint a mural of complex characters is growing. What’s more is that I believe that Kapnos, in a way, is you….

    1. Rawls

      I appreciate the positive feedback πŸ™‚

  24. Damned17

    When is part 10 illustrated of something in the water dropping?

    1. Rawls

      We’re working on it now. The next installment should release soon.

  25. Marty MG

    Loving the Kapnos doppelganger George and Lil interactions! I’ll bet he’d be more handy with a sword than the real thing which might give Albert a shock, come the dual! Can’t wait for more chapters! Bravo Rawls!

    1. Rawls

      Thanks for the feedback. Lots more on the way!

  26. youngstudent7

    A lot of good build and interesting culture touchstones of the gloves interested to see where it goes. Wonder what the original purpose of the AI and the object blocking the elevator. I wonder if this will go more Scifi or eldritch too. If the next couple chapters continue the build with some fun “climaxes” might be in my top 5 of your stories. Will it be picked up for illustration soon too?

    1. Rawls

      Thanks for all the feedback! It’s difficult to find illustrators for the long novels. It will probably be a while before this one is illustrated.

      1. anteater1

        I hope you never illustrate this story. There are some stories that need to be illustrated in the mind. In my humble opinion, this is one of those stories.

  27. Alldragon

    Is this version already corrected?

    1. Rawls

      Yes, this is the corrected version.

  28. JTass

    Need some more exposition/backstory… what’s the deal with the gloves and bare hands being a visual sexual stimulus?

    1. Osiris908

      Clearly you need to continue to read on and discover the answers to those mysteries as they unfold. Or, Rosebud.

    2. Rawls

      A woman’s bare hands are verboten by custom in their society. Like many taboo things, it has become sexualized.

    3. youngstudent7

      The gloves just seems to be something that has developed over time kind of like a regression from the free the nipples movement more recently. Kinda like how back in the Victorian era it was scandalous to see ankle or for some sets of Judaism where a woman can’t show her natural hair to anyone outside her husband/children or something.

  29. Mikey45

    I AM STARING INTO A BOTTOMLESS WELL

    1. youngstudent7

      it was fun to translate the French and Morse code. Wonder if the AI and Tim will form a link and he will start understanding the French like cybernetics and via that bioaugmentations

  30. irishluck400

    would you recommend using google translate for the french or are we not suppose to know what is being said?

    1. Rawls

      Sure, you can translate if you want to know. It’s not crucial to know what Oceane’s saying, but I do think it adds something.

      1. youngstudent7

        It really did add something. Plus gives Oceane the chance to be super sassy without the survivors noticing.

  31. luckydave

    What’s your process for employing proofreaders? Do you need any alternates? I co-edited a literary reading event for a year and I used to be an arts & culture reporter, so I have examples of my command for copy editing.

    1. Rawls

      I’m happy with the two proofreader system I have now. If one of them were to leave permanently, I’d hold a tryout for a replacement. This is what I did the last time I lost a proofreader a couple years ago. They are reliable, so I’m not looking for alternates right now. You sound like you have excellent credentials, if in the future I do lose a proofreader permanently, I hope you’d apply for the job πŸ™‚

  32. RedSarah

    I love the world building. Looking forward to finding out why everyone is completely covered.

    1. Rawls

      Thanks! I’m very excited for the mysteries in this novel πŸ™‚