The Greeves family agree to a year-long study on the effects of a new drug, Entrabide. The family are moved into a large house and monitored twenty-four hours a day to see how they’ll respond to the miracle fitness pharmaceutical. Things do not go as planned.
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It’s one of the short stories that begs for a TV movie, like some TV series, that we all think they could have those couple of extra episodes, but the network decided to end them. Maybe a year later…
I had really enjoyed this story and the final too. Very “Jurassic”, open enough for a sequel in the future.
Another excellent chapter! We need to find out what is in those creates!
oh, this was a great chapter, I could not wait to see the graphic version. it is getting better and better
Good Story…wonder if they are going to temp Sophie with the idea of answering truthfully they might let her enter the house. Also, what is going to happen if Seth meets up with a Melody or a Sophie??? Does the one with the strongest pheromones win?
Ok. Here are my thoughts so far as the series reaches reaches chapter 10:
Of course there are positives, the setting is interesting. The transformations are at first very hot (fit girl aesthetic with tight leggings, curves, and slight definition for women, vs big muscular physique for Seth…)
Still I have to question some choices. No surprise it mostly has to do with Melody, the now trans character, whom I think is superfluous and hurts the story.
Here is why: she’s overshadowing Seth. She’s more active than him which is kind of boring as he could be doing all she does instead of staying in his room. We don’t even see him train unlike the female characters which shows how much of a non-character he is turning out to be.
I think it comes from a misunderstanding: it’s low levels of testosterone which is linked to mental decline in men, not high ones. So Seth should be able to formulate plans, be proactive even if a little single-minded.
To further my point: Melody even fucks Charity and Samantha before Seth. And with ten inches, her thing is starting to rival her brother. Nothing “clitty” about it. It’s a dick. Although I’m happy that it doesn’t ejaculate at least.
I’m also sad that Sophie started growing a dick too. I had hope that she’d maybe get a slightly swollen clit. A big puffy leaky magina and the mix of slight muscles and great curves. Have an in-between transformation as you hinted. Instead it’s just another futa dude which is a shame.
Still, I have some hope: Seth didn’t kill his dad which shows that he might start to work with this new more testosterone filled mind. Also with him finally getting the sexual satisfaction he needed, it could be interesting to see him become pro-active/formulate plans, etc. I also doubt that he’d appreciate the competition of Melody (and probably Sophie now) for the women out there so hopefully he will defeat them which could cause a reaction that “deflates” their dicks and turn them back into women?
I appreciate that you’re not into the futa aspects of this story. But the story is what it is, and it won’t be going in a different direction. There are many people that want the story to pursue those aspects, including the illustrator.
Also, just a note, I don’t take suggestions for stories other than in the suggestion posts I put up on the site from time to time. But I always appreciate constructive feedback.
It won’t be long until mom’s belly swells with Seth’s baby
Chapter 10 is the best so far. I’m eager for number 11. =P
Wish there was more to read
I’m kinda liking the “son turns caveman on mom” vibe. Looking forward to the next chapter
Please don’t make us wait for the next installation and add pages.
I write the shorts as quickly as the illustrators work on them.
Please get them pregnant!
Excellent progress on chapter 2. Now Seth just needs to gain some muscle he likes and we can get some fun results.
Best story out there right now. Wish it was a full length story. Big thumbs up.
When is the next chapter of this coming out? It’s been almost 2 months since you posted this first chapter.
I write the shorts whenever the artist has completed the previous chapter. Mitzz tends to take two months or so per chapter. When I get the illustrations, I’ll write the next one.
somehow have a serum XXX dejavu,and love it,will this be a long story?please make it one
Only the main novels run long. This is one of the shorts. The shorts have shorter chapters and fewer chapters than the main novels, but still can go a while. Missus Ring is on Chapter 17 now for instance.
Really believe this will going to be a enticing story tho,will be sad if can’t see more about it with more refined language and set of pace,I believe the poll had indicate the same vision with me
Great start looking forward to seeing where the story goes.
Hi RR,
How do you decide how fast to release chapters for a series?
For the main novel, I release a chapter every Friday. For the short stories, I work as fast as the illustrator. When the illustrations from the previous chapter are ready, I write the next chapter.