Almost a century ago, something moved into the apartment building at 3838 Walnut Street. Ever since then, there have been disappearances and strange events reported. Follow several tenants as they try to uncover what’s at the heart of this preternatural building and how to stop the corruption that inevitably spreads within those walls. Their stories span different times, but they all have the same place in common: the nefarious 3838 Walnut Street.
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So, I had skipped this story all along because I wasn’t sure what to think of the cover art and description. On the illustrated one I always thought it looked like the guy was about to slice up the woman, and only after I started reading did I realize it was a ring flying away lol Silly reasons to ignore it all this time, but I finally did read first all 14 illustrated chapters (at this moment) and then powered through the rest of the text in the last 48 hours. Whew! What a ride, and I’m glad I finally did read it. I guess in some ways I’m glad I waited, since I ultimately got to read a complete novel in one shot 🙂 The whole thing was really good. Pretty fucked up at times, and a lot more gruesome than any of your others I’ve read but it worked for the story. The overall intensity reminded me of the one with the paintings which was also excellent and one of my favorites.
I know others struggled with the amount of characters, but for me I loved seeing it all come together, slowly and steadily, very well done!
Thank you for this comment and the others that you left on other stories. I appreciate the positive feedback!
Still not happy with Rosalin’s beatific but tragic end, that marred my total experience of this excellent erotic novel! But I wonder if this time the illustrated version will be completed without need for a restart! What can I say, can only wish the best! P.S Piracy brought me here, but quality was what made me subscribe. I know that costs you money, but for some countries, your reasonable fees are quite high. That:’s why, i.e. I cancel and restart my subscription
I’m glad you enjoyed this story. SatanicFruitcake has already finished one novel, so I think there’s a good chance she’ll finish this one, too. As for pirate sites: I do put out my old chapters for free. My problem isn’t so much with my stuff being on the pirate sites. It’s with my latest stuff being on the pirate sites. When that happens, I lose lots of memberships. I work very hard to keep the latest chapters on my site only.
I have to agree that it was a hell of a ride. I needed to back off from the story for awhile. I would lose interest in the characters and would have to refer to the character sheet to remember them. But when it finished, I could read in large chunks and enjoy it more.
I am glad that you are tying up some of the short stories. I have the same problem with them that I had with Walnut Street. Too many characters and too much time between updates to the stories. Makes it harder for me to stay captured.
I would also like to compliment you on your overflowing erotic creativity.
Thanks for the detailed feedback! Some people like the episodic nature of the stories, but for others, waiting may be one’s best bet. I think there’s no harm in waiting for me to finish, especially for the really long novels. I try to streamline the shorter stories, so hopefully they do better with the episodic nature of their publishing.
As other’s have said this was a hell of a ride. I love the story, the pacing was fantastic you have so many characters in this but I never felt lost. In the beginning I did but you had the timeline thing and after awhile once I remembered the characters I started to get less confused. The main story is awesome love the horror elements to it. I love love Rose she is my favorite character. Love what you did with her and oh that ending with her I felt that I felt she deserved that after everything she went through. Despite me wanting her to stay a sex slave lol but I love that ending it made sense. The way you wrote this made everything make sense. What you did with the two asshole sons made sense to me I mean the story you wrote it had to happen that way. Also I want to say the way you wrote Joe here, this is the first time that I was into the good guy character in your stories at least as something with a huge cast. I think it’s because you didn’t focus on him so much in the beginning so he was a side character so there less focus so I felt I was more interested in him because I’m more like ok what’s gonna happen with him and not feel bored by him. at least for me. I don’t know but anyone else but this is the best way to write these types of characters. I wouldn’t mind if you kept writing these characters like this but like I said it’s just me. Cutting a lot of the fluff and being a little tighter with his story is what worked.
So much good stuff I do have a few minor things. I feel after you finish with Brian’s character stuff I felt the story didn’t feel as tight. At the end just a little a felt like certain things were not fully fleshed out or a bit rushed. To me at least. The ending I felt it was good I do like the ending but I wouldn’t mind if you did one more chapter to give it a bit more of a breather. Certain characters like Rose’s son I would’ve like to see what happens to him at the end. Granted not everything needs to be spelled out but still just a few more clues or a little bit of examples of what happen to certain characters.
Well done on this Rawlys looking forward to the next main novel. Also want to say I know I wasn’t down for the short story stuff however over the past few months since that announcement I’ve tried to read your short stories that would have new chapters and man it felt like blue balls. Not your fault because they are supposed to be short but I’m down with you writing more shorts for awhile. Also do let me know if this comment comes off wrong to you. I don’t want to be an ass just want to give my points and view on your stories and just passionate fan. But if this comment comes off wrong to you do let me know. Anyways take care Rawls and good work again. Love this story. Thanks for doing this type of story again.
I hope you write more stories with asshole sons again also I think this type of story works for many settings. Like on a starship or mansion or other places. Also wouldn’t mind if you wrote a short or main story that starts a chapter in the first person like the way Rose did for a bit in the story.
Thank you for the constructive feedback! I’m glad you liked the story. I don’t plan these things out so much anymore, so I’ll be surprised by the characters they come to life as much as you. I hope you’ll enjoy the stories that come next.
i also have follow up questions about the ending, Did Brian and Rachael turn into Stags’/Does themselves? Was there some type of Red Wedding type of situation that happened as they approached the chappel? its weird but im just so curious!!
Based on what happened to poor Marcus Wilkins, I would suspect that they weren’t turned strictly into a stag and doe but were some sort of monstrous human hybrid. When they showed up in the chapel, it was carnage. Even without the building collapsing, Ogganse would be the only survivor.
Wow even the characters that’s wild. Your welcome Rawls. I really truly loved it it. Like I said I think this type of story can work in any setting.
Brava. (Bravo?) I hate to carp after reading this delicious yarn. But there are three hanging issues:
1. Did Rosalin survive? And if so, as what?
2. What ever became of Betsy Lavey and her son?
3. Most important: what about the Ostrows? We have been waiting through the entire story to find out!
Can you clarify? Or are those details left intentionally dangling?
Thanks for a great read.
Thanks for the feedback! Yes, I like to wrap up the big threads, and then leave some things open for the reader to imagine.
1) What happened to Rosalin is open your interpretation of Ogganse’s words and powers. She certainly didn’t make it out before the building collapsed.
2) Nothing good happened to them, I’m sure. This was a massive novel, so I only followed characters that were relevant to moving the plot forward.
3) It was inferred that they were sacrificed by Elizabeth. But we never get a clear answer. One thing is certain, they went into 3838 Walnut Street, but never came out.
That was quite the ride, Rawly. This was a long one, but definitely worth the wait to get to the end. 🙂
Thanks so much! I’m glad you enjoyed it 🙂
Will be there illustrated version of this masterpiece?
I’ve got good news for you! https://rawlyrawls.com/3838-walnut-street-illustrated/
I trust wherever you’re taking this story; its looking really promising so far. Joe and his mom are together now since he and Hani broke up. And Hani seems to hate/want her brother. Would be nice to see everything kept in the family. Maybe Hani and Joe reconcile after breeding/being bred by family members. Always great work Rawls!
Ok sorry, will purchase it next month till than has to wait
https://discord.com/invite/GwTTzfAg
Great, thank you for understanding.
Hey did anyone has the free version for this, i am very keen in knowing what happened after chapter 24.
Ps : i am a student and little bit behind on the wallet this month, so plz if anyone can help
What you’re asking for is theft of my work. This is a warning. If you ask again, you will be banned from my site. Piracy costs me thousands of dollars a month in revenue. I take it very seriously. If you can’t afford a membership, I post older chapters for free on Reddit and Literotica.
Damn, what a good chapter! “Condoms are for her” what a line
Bro can you share the pdf plz i am very excited to read newer chapters
What you’re asking for is theft of my work. This is a warning. If you ask again, you will be banned from my site. Piracy costs me thousands of dollars a month in revenue. I take it very seriously. If you can’t afford a membership, I post older chapters for free on Reddit and Literotica.
When you’re finished, can you create a version that is laid out in chronological order?
Sorry, I don’t think I’ll do that. The story was ordered this way to create a better narrative.
Here’s what I did. Read this on your laptop and open multiple tabs have the timeline chart and then the story. Then go back and forth when it shows you a date. After awhile at least for me I didn’t need it. Plus reading it I feel the stories basically overlap. And I feel that helps the pacing. Though putting this in order would be a interesting idea.
A weirdness in the posted timeline: You have listed July 22, 1957 for apartment 14B, but you haven’t provided a précis for the episode. I presume that this was an oversight. Can you provide one?
Also, in the story on page 335 a little more than halfway down, it says that Rosalin hadn’t seen this woman since Rachel’s ceremony. I presume that you meant Rosalin’s ceremony, right?
For the July 22 entry, that was an error. I’ll fix it for the next timeline that releases. Thank you for catching that.
For page 335, that wasn’t an error. In the interim, Rachel had her own ceremony. It wasn’t shown in the text, and only alluded to in Rosalin’s thoughts here.
How many chapters will 3838 Walnut Street have?
I’m not sure. We’re in the third act, so probably it will end in the 30s.
I’m guessing you already have this mapped out….but it would be so hot if Hani also sniffed a cum sock and this helped wear down her reluctance towards her bro…
Also would love cari to slowly get pulled into joe…maybe having Hani involved as well…
Wow. What a fire chapter. Love to see Brian’s Bevy expanding. And Uba and Abshir are always a favourite. Dirty sock idea was definitely a winner
Lol. Why the fuck does everyone keep saying “Uma”? It’s Uba. But yes, the Uba and Abshir chapters are straight fire! Dirty sock for the win
I’m still liking this series however you rushed to fast with Uma I wish you stayed there for them to fuck. Wev’e been waiting awhile and you make it to fast. Hopefully they have more sex soon because that was super disappointing. Love the rest of it but hopefully more sex with Uma would be nice.
I love the Uma series also. It’s so exciting. When I’m waiting for new releases I find myself rereading the previous chapters.
Was happy to see it move forward, but slightly disappointed with the transition to oral…it was done almost matter of factly/in past tense. Would have gotten off more with him forcefully initiating that…with her a bit reluctant at the offset. Then, getting a taste and losing herself…
To me, the oral step is a really big one…
Still….love the series.
Uma chapters are your best work!
I gotta say, I am absolutely loving Uba and Abshir’s storyline! Can’t wait for the next chapter!
me reading the ending to the last chapter. BRUH! lol Rawls you son of bitch lol I kid. but man now I have to wait till next week. Good shit. Funny how me and that one guys complained about that characters story spinning it’s wheels now you finally moved forward with him curious about the other son, Joe or whatever. hopefully that moves forward faster now as well. But holy crap can’t wait til next week.
Hey Rawls I have a question. I’m loving the story with a few tiny exceptions that I mentioned below. One of the things I wanted to ask is what made you want to go back to making the asshole sons again because I went back to one of the previous comments on your old stories and you said you didn’t feel that interested in writing these characters anymore and wanted to save them for the short stories which I was disappointed in but seeing this I’m happy you went back to them and no subversion like in Mother’s return. So I’m just curious was it just fan demand to bring them back or was it the premise of the story and please, please tell me you are planning to do more assholes sons again.
These stories often write themselves. This is what this particular horror tale called for 🙂
To be honest wasn’t expecting that answer. Ok so Basically as you thought it up you felt the story needed these type of characters. Well I’m glad it did then really glad. I really hope UT happens again and you use asshole sons.
I have a lot less control over what happens in the stories than you would think 🙂 Like I said, the stories and characters tell me what needs to happen next, not the other way around.
Interesting. So basically once you start writing is when the plot and characters come into your mind? You don’t think of it before hand. Also I thought you did have more control or what not because I recall you telling me that you thought that the asshole sons were getting boring and you wanted to keep them in short stories. Was this the case in the past stories as well because your son characters were basically the same. Forgive all the questions in genuinely curious.
I have a few details set before I write. Often I know how it will end, generally. Then, as I start writing, the details fill in and the scope of the story becomes clearer. I used to be a big outliner, but now I write mostly by the seat of my pants.
So this is my favorite story right now….. however…
I feel like the recent Abshir chapter was just a missed opportunity. I love a long n slow wear down of resistance…but I feel like it’s just getting redundant now. Same with the Joe character.
Nothing real exciting has happened in too long.
Ok, that’s too strong….each sexual encounter between abshir n his mom are hot… just feels like it should move forward from handjobs…not necessarily jumping straight to intercoarse but we’ve done hand jobs for the last 85 chapters…or so…
Yeah I agree somewhat however the story is not done yet but there’s to much spinning wheels. Joe’s I feel needs to pick up more but this is still my favorite story in a long time.
Agreed
Jesus fucking christ that last part was hot as fuck. Also I like the story with Tom as well. You have struck gold with this one Rawls. Also a few questions. Are there other people in the apartments or just them. Because Brian said or you in the writing that he didn’t care if the people above them heard. But as far as I know there arne’t other people. i’m just curious.
Thanks for the feedback! Glad you’re enjoying it. Yes, the building is mostly full of tenants. But for pacing issues, we haven’t seen many of them.
Perhaps the supernatural creates a void around the family so know one else can see them or pay attention or can make the other tenants see duplicates of them as a normal family. For example, Rose can go out and see someone else and they can either not see her or say oh what are you doing here I just say you a few seconds ago. I mean you don’t really have to explain it but I feel that this could work.
The other tenants do hear them and see them in the halls. But Elizabeth controls the building by 1993, so everyone in the building, especially those near the important top floors, are vetted and on board with Elizabeth’s plans.
Oh I see. Do you remember or did you mention this in the story. I’m just curious of you didn’t that’s ok. I’m fine if you didn’t I’m just curious. Sorry for all the questions.
There are little hints throughout the story, but it hasn’t been a focus.
Hi
I noticed you use Somali characters in your work and I like how accurate you are with spelling their names. What’s the story behind it if you don’t mind?
I live in an area where lots of Somali people have settled. And they say, write what you know.
That’s nice. I myself am a Somali so it’s cool to see Somali characters in your work. We are usually portrayed negatively in media if we are portrayed at all so it is a nice change of pace albeit in erotica 🙂
Great to hear!
Wish you would continue this story until it’s finished before going back to your other continuing stories…
This story gets updated weekly with a 4,500+ word chapter. That’s a pretty compelling pace 🙂 There would be few illustrated chapters if I didn’t also write the short stories at the same time. Also, people tend to enjoy the variety with the stories on this site.
I agree with the idea of this post….I wish for all of this story all at once. At the same time there are 2 or 3 of the illustrated stories that I also look forward to and can hardly wait for newly released illustrated chapters
Would it be possible to save these text only files into 10 chapter, separate files. Liquid mode doesn’t support when they get so large….makes hard to read on phone….in bed…
It tends to be more comfortable reading these that way than at my desk….
Isn’t it odd the things that turn our crank? I know there are alot of other hot story lines in this one, and I will go back to them later.
I find myself waiting, with baited breath for each new update.
I skip….OK, skim a bit…to the 2015 stories.
It’s a ridiculous concept that any mom would find crusty, cum-filled socks an irresistible aphrodisiac…and yet, that lead in to seduction is finding its way to my O Folder multiple times.
In the Joe story when he started dominating his mom it was pretty hot too….the finger pulling her face to look at him and making her repeat back…I’d kinda like to see a bit more….
Can’t wait until this is illustrated! I guess that’s going to take forever still, huh?
Hot story. Enjoying tremendously
Thanks for the feedback! I don’t think I can break up the stories into smaller chunks like that. If you’re having issues reading it on your phone, I recommend asking about how to get around those issues on my Discord server. People there are often helpful 🙂
OK, one bit of constructive criticism for Chapter 21 – How does someone play a rap song on a trumpet?
Something like this. 🙂 https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=S695ZqHlu2c
Okaaaaaay.
Not to quibble, but that’s not really playing the song on just a trumpet though. That was inserting accent trumpet notes over a synth track of the song.
Haha, I didn’t mean he was playing exactly that. I just meant that there the song has an instrumental version that he can play.
Holy shit future Rose. I forgot that part was in the future. More questions hopefully we see more of her in that timeline. Good stuff man i’m digging this a lot. Thank you for this. It’s a real treat.
Glad you’re enjoying it!
Just got around to reading this chapter… FYI – If this takes place in Manhattan, it should be the Upper East Side rather than Upper Eastside.
Thanks! I’ll fix this.
It’s really good. So many hot scenes. Only complaint/comment: Carrie has been listening in at Joe’s door for like ten chapters now. Nothing ever changes, the same scene with the same reactions is repeated chapter after chapter with Carrie standing outside his door…
Thanks for the feedback! How funny would it be if the story ends with Carrie still outside her son’s door, eyes wide, hand to her mouth?
I can see that and to me there are other little things that are happening that I find interesting that it doesn’t bother me to much but that is a good criticism. Also, it feels to me refreshing because he is the only one who is nice and the main focus here seems to be the asshole sons, which I have been wanting for a long time. So I don’t mind if this son takes a back seat. But tiny things with the plot, imagery and the typical slow burn that Rawls likes to do is working for me. Another thing this makes more sense to me at least depending where it goes when the mom falls to him that she has been listening and slowly being seduced. There are stages of the seduction with each son and she is taking the longest but in due time she will become his.
I have a request that you should put a little summary of previous chapter when you release a new chapter it will help us to remember what happened previously otherwise we don’t fell excited when we read new chapter because we don’t remember sometimes what happened earlier and we loose interest in the story
Thanks
Hello, there are summaries for each scene in the timeline document.
Dude….you can’t post an update that ends mid ball lick….
I am not taking particularly about this story.
When you release a new chapter of a story(any story) after title before getting to the subject you should put a summary.
I’m not sure how feasible that would be for me to put together, but I’ll look into it.
Any chance SatanicFruitcake picks this up after wicked tower is over ?
Yes, that is the plan! 🙂 I posted about this here: https://rawlyrawls.com/an-update-on-two-new-projects-coming-soon/
Editing question: In chapter 15, December 15, 1993, on page 157 near the bottom, Rosalin wonders if the police will find the Olmstead remains (two occurrences.) Nowhere else in the story are the Olmsteads referred to. Did you intend to refer to the Ostrows? Or is there yet another family disappearance to be explained?
Thanks again! They were indeed supposed to be the Ostrows. Another error slipped through, I appreciate you catching it. 🙂
That small scene with Joe at the end noticing the blood. Interesting, what does that mean? I thought I had the story kinda figured out. I mean with the sons. I figured ok he’s going this way with the sons but Joe noticing the blood and his small reaction. Hmmmmm….. I’m actually curious. Probably nothing, most likely looking to much into it. But it makes me think about his character some more. Also excellent job with the story Rawls loving it. Not a dull moment and I enjoy all the asshole sons. Love it. you have me thinking now about the story. Which is good. Keep up the good work and see ya soon.
Thanks for the feedback. I’m glad you’re enjoying it 🙂
Wow. All I can say is that latest chapter is the hottest new material I’ve read in a long time. I can’t wait for the next one.
In chapter 17, May 4, 2015, page 178 towards the end of the section: There is a serious editing error. “That’s good.” Hani nodded. It should read “Uba nodded.” Sorry that this note is so late.
Thanks for spotting it! It’ll be fixed in today’s version.
This is my new favorite story. Anxiously waiting for updates and thrilled when they come out
Glad to hear it, I appreciate the feedback 🙂
Definitely a big fan of your work. Can’t wait for this one to be illustrated!
In chapter 15 at the bottom of page 158, Rosalin hears panting from the “perusing” wolf. This one is easy to figure out, but you obviously meant “pursuing.” And seeing perusing is really rather jarring.
Yes; I’m a part-time editor on the side… (Oh, and I like the story.)
Thanks for the sharp eyes! This will be fixed on future versions of the story.
Hey Rawls. I wanted to say that I’m loving this story. I am really, really loving this story .I feel this has amazing pacing. Everything feels good in this story. I don’t think there is a dull moment in this whatsoever. I feel when you jump back and forth between characters it doesn’t feel jarring. You have things moving quickly and the best I can describe this it feels like mothership and Palmer mansion. Like you mix those two up and you have the same pacing as those two. Nothing feels ridiculously slow, plodding or filler. This is going wonderfully. Also thank you for all the sons being assholes. I’ve been wanting for awhile again and I have to say thank you. This makes this story so much fun again. I also like the story as well. I like the horror elements of it. Also one thing that I feel works better here is that you don’t have the son being or acting like the detective in the story trying to figure things out at least not now perhaps you will but regardless you don’t have that. No good guys son just corrupted and aggressive. Very much appreciate that. Seeing that makes me even more curious were it’s gonna go plus it’s not something i’ve seen already. The sexual tension is there the seduction is there as well. So there isn’t a point of the story were I am bored or thinking when is this gonna happen. No you have the seduction and that makes it so much better. This feels like your old stories and being back in form. also this is an example of me not hating a big cast it was always the pacing. Tremendous job on this Rawls I look forward to this story.
Thanks for the feedback! I’m glad you’re enjoying this one. I don’t think Joe has been corrupted by the building the same way the others have. Which is to say, he’s not an asshole. We’ll see how it develops.
Interesting. Joe Maryland right? If that’s him then I’m very curious with that then from what you say..
Yes, that Joe is way more relaxed and confident than he used to be, but he’s still a gentleman. Other than making his mom by him condoms, of course 🙂
Well of course lol. OK so that’s what threw me off a bit. Reading the latest chapter you are correct. I guess I was looking at it from the mom’s perspective. But hopefully some of that jerkyness comes out like the condom part. Good stuff I like his story as well. I look forward to reading more of this. I also look forward to the illustrations I feel reading it again like that will help me even more to fully get it.
Chapter 10 has another typo on the last page, and I think it matters.. On the first line of page 111, Abshir muses about checking in with “her”. I think you mean “Her”, right?
Thank you! Yes, you’re right, he will be checking in with Her. I’ve fixed it and it will be correct in the version that releases next Friday.
As long as you’re fixing stuff: on page 107 about half way down, “She stood wearily, ready to catch him…” I figured it out, but you surely meant “warily”. The meaning is quite different; wearily makes no sense.
Thanks for correction! It was a typo and will be fixed in the next release of the story.
Nasty error on the last page of chapter 8? The date given for the last section is February 1954, but you specified December 1954 in a previous section with these characters. Did you mean 1955, or is time going backwards?
Thank you for catching this typo. Time is not running backwards 🙂 It should say 1955. It will be corrected in the version of the story published next week.
Wow. This one is really wild, you have outdone yourself. It gives me slight Donnie darko mixed with devil’s advocate vibes mixed with the usual rawly magic. The interconnected, possibly converging, timelines give the it a sense of mystery, a puzzle to be solved. You also have high stakes as a character dies, is killed by another character. People died in the space cruise ship adventure but as a result of radiation and a monster but this is the second time that one of your characters commits a murder.
Thanks so much for the feedback. Really leaning into the erotic horror with this one. Lots more darkness ahead 🙂
Usually the enhanced virility/fertility of the characters is to the character’s advantage and happiness but in this one, even if they ‘win’ they still could ‘lose’ as who knows what the successful ritual will entail? It’s already cost one character and to no apparent benefit. For me, at least, it does feel like almost anything could happen to any of the characters both good and bad and the danger or horror could come from almost anywhere or anyone.
I also like how you have given your characters a bit of depth and not gone for cliches. The young Muslim women is vivacious and naughty instead of shy and passive.
I have noticed a trend with your young vivacious women characters like Maggie chambers and Ava Roslin; their character arcs seem to petter out or are pawned off to lesser character. Maggie chambers storyline was dropped particularly unceremoniously. Now it was a gods wrath that did it and that the reader feels the loss of that character is good for the oft repeated stakes of the story. I just think that the willingness of a slightly outsiderish person to be part and party to some of the more wicked activities adds to the libertine and debauched elements/themes in the story. As a reader one wonders if these vivacious characters couldn’t be useful conduits for bringing other women into the male protagonists sway, particularly women the vivacious character has a close relationship with. Your writings have a particular focus and ultimately it’s your bbq and it taste good, I just wonder if this particular ingredient might be put to more effective use.
At any rate, I am enjoying the mystery and the darkness in this story. Ithink you have really hit on something here. Please continue the great work.
this story is tagged as complete. is it still the main story or did you change your mind? also, i was wondering if it would be possible to tag add more nuanced tags to your stories going forward?
Thanks for pointing that out. It was an error because I made the page by cloning the last main novel which was complete. This story is ongoing.
I haven’t made more nuanced tags, because the thought of organizing that way exhausts me. But you can let me know what you had in mind, and I’ll think it over.
NP (y)
So I wasn’t thinking anything too complicated, mainly what forces are at play and whether the darkstone is involved or not. for example: Faaris B/Noises/surviving were more about blackmail/coercion/moral degradation over time, mothership/entrabide/serum/SitWater/etc were more science fictiony, and Palmers/aztec/etc were paranormal driven. Since you have relatively few stories (compared to literotic, for ex) I don’t think extensive tagging is necessary but as you write more stories it would be nice to tag some more nuanced themes. perhaps cuckholdry labels and such for this story and surviving the after. I’m happy to help if you’re interested 🙂
Is this one in the queue to be illustrated?
Yes, SatanicFruitcake has decided to illustrate this after she’s done with Wicked Tower.
I’m really liking this story, when do the updates usually come out?
This is a main novel, so a new chapter comes out every Friday.
Thank you for the time-line chart. It really helped me.
I appreciate the feedback!
So far, the 1954 setting is my favorite. The 2015 segments are a close second with 1993 in third place.
FYI – I noticed a typo on page 19:
“Here me … Brian Kwon … I am Ogganse”
Should be “Hear me …”
Good catch, thank you! It will be changed for the next version of the story on Friday.
Ok reading this I’m worried. This feels like it’s gonna be a convulted mess again. No offense. But I will of course give it a chance it’s just that your not very good at multiple stories at the same time and having it all make sense. Also depending how you write them I hope it’s not another something in the water. I hope whatever son it is is more like David then Patrick. Also put the different names and dates in bold and with different colors it would be easier to identify each story. Rawlys your scaring me with this story right now and I didn’t like the last one and didn’t like the last story with a big cast. I’m crossing my fingers this works for me. Keep it simple and have good pacing. For the love of God please.
I feel like maybe my stories aren’t for you. You are entitled to like what you like, but so am I. And so are all the other 2600+ paying members on this site.
I do like the large casts and evolving story arcs myself, but its often a fine line between being a fun read and a convoluted mess. For your longer stories, I tend to wait for a few chapters to be available before reading.
i put my foot in my mouth again on both stories. I’ll stop commenting or comment less. I do have criticisms at times but I still like your work but I do get to passionate and my last comment on mother’s return especially the language was uncalled for. I’ll just wait and see and just use a few words. Your stories are still good especially your shorts. I just get carried away. I’ll stop now. Making you uncomfortable and frustrated with me wasn’t what I wanted. I need to learn how to do a better job of doing this.
Again, thank you for the apology. I appreciate it.
Loved the new storyline, I hope it is maneageable not to get confused on story timelines. My sugestion is to try to concentrate on one timeline and avoid jumping around to much.
Agreed
Hi! Im only curious. Why start another story when there are so many good ongoing stories that are coming out much slower than for example Mother Returned. That story is the perfect example of what i mean. One story comes out fast and leaves all the others on hold. Take the new Palmer story for example, here the illustrated version is out looong before the next chapter is out. My favorite The Pleistocene Ring last chapter came out in november 🙁 Surviving the after is another very good story that i would love to see come out more often. Just my thoughts.
I have one very long novel going at a time, it’s not written for illustrations. All the other stories are shorter and written for illustrations. I write the next chapter when the illustrator is ready for them.
Thanks for all the comments so far! I’m looking forward to delivering more chapters!
Love the occult mystery angle of this story. The cadence of the braided stories is great. Excited to read more!
I’m really enjoying this so farl. Nice to start out with the intense stuff in the 50’s, and then we have an idea of what the other time periods and perspectives are leading to, without giving away the ‘why’ of it all. I’ve no doubt this is going to be an exciting one to see unfold every week
more like 1.5 times a month…
The main story novel chapters come every week on Friday. I haven’t missed one yet since starting in 2021.
Great start. Already a fan of the atmosphere and setting. I’m imagining the building as a perverted version of The Arconia from Only Murders in the Building.
The format of the narrative with the perspective of multiple families across timelines makes for an intriguing mystery.
Didn’t anticipate the format for this story. Will definitely be following this one!
exciting new beginning to another main story!